As You Requested…More Novel Teaser

the breath

Evony

Settling herself in for the night, Evony turned on her side and closed her eyes. 

Only a moment later, she felt the bed shudder a little.  Opening her eyes, she glanced around the room.  Shadows seem to lurk in the corners as her eyes strained to absorb enough light to see.  Rolling her eyes at her paranoia, she again closed her eyes and settled under the covers.

Just as she was falling asleep, she again felt the bed shake a little.  Confused, she sat up and searched the room for answers.  There just wasn’t anything there that she could see.  Usually, if there was a ghost coming for a visit, they would contact her thoughts first or present themselves visually somehow, so not to scare her.

It just had to be this new house guest and Evony was certainly not appreciative of it’s tactics.  Before she could send out a message to the being, her bed shook somewhat violently.  

Leaning over, Evony could see something forming on the  metal frame. She saw what looked like two shadowy hands grasping the edge.  Her heart starting pounding as she watched the entity slowly pull itself from under the bed.  Writhing and twisting as it forced it’s body out from the small gap between the mattress and the floor. 

Her bed was only raised up a couple of inches from the floor, so no human could fit under there.

Terrified, Evony pushed herself back against the headboard as this dark mist began to take shape in front of her.  Finally as it slowly took the physique of a human’s silhouette, it just stood and glared at her.  She could feel the negative energy dripping off of the creature as it began moving closer to her.

Writhing blackness shifted slowly within it, moving as though it were suspended in water.  Evony pushed herself into the corner between the bed and the wall, watching in horror as the entity loomed in closer.  Trembling, the energy paused only inches from her face, as though inspecting her. 

Though the wafting vapour had no real features, Evony started to see a hardening within the facial structure.  Her eyes were drawn in as the creature’s face started to take shape. 

Eye sockets formed in the blackness, cheekbones and then a snarling smile.  Long hair flooded out the back of it’s head as it floated menacingly above Evony.

Entranced for the moment, Evony saw a distinct face emerge from the onyx haze. For just a split second, she was looking at herself.  Her facial features, though etched in the black velvet cloud, were perfectly mimicked.

With this realization, the entity then quickly began changing again.  Before Evony’s eyes, the image of her face was shredded and torn apart to reveal a hideous black skull. 

Sliding down into the bed, Evony felt her consciousness slipping away from her.  Fainting, the room spun furiously as she fought against the impending blackness. 

The moment before she faded into the stillness, she could have swore she heard it’s evil laugh penetrate her thoughts.

~ by thespiritguide on October 7, 2009.

3 Responses to “As You Requested…More Novel Teaser”

  1. I have to tell you that you can WRITE!
    That is some scene and it causes REACTIONS I can tell you.
    That is great stuff. Two different segments of your novel, and I do appreciate how difficult it must be to select a piece that doesn’t give away major plot points etc, these two have been very powerful and you’ve done a great job.
    I also think you make up great quotes.
    I sometimes write some of them down and I fail to always note which are yours and which you may have posted from another person, who wrote this one, because it is still giving me real food for thought:
    “You cannot embody the light until you embrace the dark.”

    • Thank you! I tried to write you an email to see what kind of sample you’d like to see but it wouldn’t send. :C

      That quote is one that I made up, it’s one of my favorites too. I’m so happy you like it. :D

      I have some more samples that I might release too, I let a few of my friends on facebook read some of my favorite excerpts from the book, ones that didn’t give away too much. There are some pretty crucial moments in the book that I want to save for that “OMG!!” moment for the readers. hehe

      Thank you again for your wonderful comments, I truly appreciate them more than you know. :D

      Hugs,
      Danielle

  2. Thanks for sharing this vision of what is on the horizon.

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